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Hey I managed to write two of the drabbles that I was dared to write from this post.

They're both from Chrno Crusade with possible spoilers involved so if you plan on reading it then, I'm sorry. As much as it pains me to say this, I'd avoid reading my drabbles -TTWTT-

I haven't forgotten about the drabble I still owe you, [livejournal.com profile] ladynathena, so don't worry~ ->W<- <33333

For anyone else who'd like to dare me as well~ feel free to request one! lol <333

For those who know Chrno Crusade, I'd love to hear what you thought of it. Please give me a small critique on how I could possibly improve it before I post it on DA~<333 Thank you so much!

Requested by [livejournal.com profile] glitteringloke

Title: Broken Doll
Fandom: Chrno Crusade
Characters: Aion x Fiore (Shader mentioned)
Word Count: 264
Rating: MA (sexual context)

Disclaimer: Chrno Crusade © Moriyama Daisuke

The man glanced at the brown paper bag in his hand and heavily sighed. Day by day, he noticed the changes. "Master, if you could please pick up some coffee beans for me." The facial expressions that she exhibited now were more dynamic than before. The way she'd look at him. The way she nervously watched everyone taste her meals. The face she made when ordered to create the jewels. How "human" she was becoming again. He couldn’t believe it.

"Everything is good to go! She won’t go against your orders. From now on, she’s… your doll."

He had to be certain of those words. A soft caress of her cheek and the whispers of his demand revived the same stained cheeks she expressed on the first day they met. A strand of concern filled his mind even as she went through her normal custom of curtsying and proceeding to carry out his wishes on her knees. His skillful hands pushed every button expecting nothing to pass her lips but the focus on hand. The man’s violet eyes carefully studied her until he was satisfied. It seemed that not all of the natural reactions were deadened as he observed the changes in her breathing with a final flick of his finger across her moistened bud. He couldn’t help but place an amused grin across his lips as he adjusted his glasses. It was clearly written on her face as she lowered her head to avoid his gaze. She was no longer solely his doll, if a doll at all; A broken doll.

Requested by [livejournal.com profile] haleysings
[Spoiler Warning]

Title: Words
Fandom: Chrno Crusade
Characters: Aion x Chrno
Word Count: 282
Rating: MA

Disclaimer: Chrno Crusade © Moriyama Daisuke

The strong clash of their bodies fused them into one; the connector being the violent thrust to his chest. The pain coursed through the demon as he loudly grunted in vain. He sprouted his blood and couldn’t help but lightly laugh to the situation at hand. This was some way to go. He slowly closed the remaining gap between them as his left hand took a hold of his right. The terrified look on his face greatly amused him. How easily the other fell into the depths of his emotions. The darker man cupped the side of his brother’s face with his right as he placed his forehead against his. It felt as if everything the man was feeling had flown into him; pitiful idiot with his sentiments. He gave his cheek a good pat and a word of goodbye before breaking off the tie; the blade slicing through his opponent’s right arm as his body heavily fell to the ground. Along with a hand gently placed on top of the residual limb on his chest, a brief content smile graced his face while drawing the final curtains to his own story.

The purple-haired demon gasped for air and held his head with his intact hand in dismay. He cursed the fallen man as he was left with only those words to repeat itself in his mind. Tearful eyes darted at him, he managed to at least mumble a single line before the lifeless limb hit the blood-stained floor. The bastard. He could only pray it reached him for the man selfishly went without another word but leaving his infamous, deceitful grin proudly painted across his lips.

I love you, too, brother.

Date: Friday, May 8th, 2009 01:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] glitteringloke.livejournal.com
♥♥ i emailed you my thoughts ^_^ *plots to start making you a sexy aion coat so i can resurrect my fi*

Date: Friday, May 8th, 2009 09:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] haleysings.livejournal.com
Oooh, these were both really good! <3 Aion/Fiore is still a little bit creepy to me, but the reasoning behind the scene made sense. My only critique on it is I think the word "humane" isn't quite what you're looking for--that means something more along of compassion and sympathy for other people and animals. Fiore might have that, but it doesn't make much sense in the context it's in. I can't figure out a word that means exactly what you're looking for..."aware", maybe? Cognizant?
...Unless you just mean human, in which case I'm overanalyzing this. XD

And the Chrono/Aion one...T_T That was so sad! I like the idea of Aion and Chrono acknowledging their relationship a final time before Aion dies. And the contrast between Aion and Chrono, too--Aion going out with a smile while Chrono watches with tears in his eyes, for example. Aion's at peace with his choice, and Chrono still has nothing but questions. (But, ha, that's probably me putting my own feelings about the characters and story onto the piece.)

My main critique with that one is that it's a little hard to tell who's being talked about. For example: He slowly closed the remaining gap between them as his left hand took a hold of his right. Aion's left hand, right? Is he holding his own hand, or Chrono's? (I know logically it's Chrono, but it's not clear from this sentence.) Don't be afraid to use their names a little more often to make it clearer!

Date: Sunday, May 10th, 2009 08:44 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] haleysings.livejournal.com
XD I think I almost like it, too, but at the same time it's...creepy. I'm torn. LOL, what sort of kink would that be? Mind control? Or just a think for emotionless girls? Oooh, I gotcha. Yeah, fancy words are good, but you gotta make sure the meaning is the right one you're looking for. Using a dictionary is good for that (I checked humane in the dictionary before commenting, actually)--dictionary.com works just fine and is free, so yeah.

It's okay! Sad is great when written well! I'm an angst whore, and Aion/Chrono...I mean...They have happy moments, but their relationship (whether romantic, platonic or brotherly) is going to end up tragically. And I don't think Chrono was too emotional...he's really one of the most emotional characters in the series (besides Rosette, and maybe Azmaria), and finding out someone you used to respect and care for is really your brother, but you have to kill him anyway...I wouldn't be surprised if Chrono mourned him. Even knowing all the horrible things he did and being unable to forgive him for it, I still don't think he'd be able to feel something other than sadness at Aion's death. (Actually, I've sort of toyed with the idea of canon-updating Chrono to after that point to play with that, but I'm not sure if I'm finished with developing pre-carnival Chrono or not.)

Yeah. XD;; Experimenting is good! And some mystery can sometimes be good, too. But I think readers like clarity...if that makes sense. I keep saying stuff I learned in Creative Writing class. XD;

You're welcome! Thank you for writing them!

Date: Sunday, May 10th, 2009 09:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] haleysings.livejournal.com
LOOOOOOL maybe that's it. XDDD So you like a master-and-servant sort of thing and I like...puppets. With a side of mind-control. We're....quite a pair. XD Oooh, lack of sleep I can understand. And I kinda know what you mean about writing down ideas, too. XD Although I don't normally get a drive quite that big, but sometimes I just HAVE to write.

"It" being their relationship? I've been thinking that. XD Particularly now that we've only got the twins and Mary...it'd be an interesting plot twist to pull. Actually, it might be fun to see how pre-Carnageival Chrono deals with learning about Aion being his brother. Hmmmm...

That works much better. <33 Not too redundant, but the clarity is really kicked up a notch. Nicely done!

Date: Sunday, May 10th, 2009 09:26 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] haleysings.livejournal.com
XD I can understand that somewhat, then. Come to think of it, I've seen that in the tutu fandom, too...b-but it was even worse there OTL oh man XD KINK MEMES, MAN. Scary stuff! Ooooh, hey, I think that's great! If you've got an impulse, go with it! ...I wake up and just wonder dazedly where I am, what day it is, and if I've slept past noon again. XD;;

We'll have to see if we can set up something with that, maybe~ Sometime after Aion/Ahiru stuff, maybe. xDDDD

<3 You're welcome!


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